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Hey!

“Good packaging” is often given credit for making videos go viral.

But that begs the question:

Why do two videos with almost identical packaging perform so differently?

Of course, there are many factors that influence video performance.

But there are always clues the script.

And the easiest place to start is the hook.

So I recorded a quick video showing you how to:

1. Identify a video concept with a high "views ceiling".
2. Find a video with similar packaging.
3. Analyse their hook scripting styles and how they might have contributed to vastly different video performance.

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Speak soon,
George 👋

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Hey

This is probably the most "real talk" newsletter I've written for months.

It started out as me journalling to myself, but the more I wrote, the more I realised I wanted to share this...

Scriptwriting is a weird part of YouTube.

Especially as a “freelance scriptwriter”, you’re basically “subbed in” to keep an existing train rolling.

You’re not really expected to grow the channel.

Good scriptwriting is necessary to grow a channel faster, but it’s not sufficient.

This has pros and cons:

On the plus side, if a video completely bombs, it’s probably an issue with the core idea, how it’s framed, or how it’s packaged.

It’s rare that you can point to the script and say “this is the main reason the video failed”.

On the flip side, just as you can’t really be blamed for a video flopping, you can’t really take credit for a video going viral either 😂

You occupy a weird middle ground where your value is probably quantified more by your ability to free up your client’s time than it is by your ability to write “viral scripts”.

Protecting your reputation

This is why I get a bit uncomfortable when I’m introduced on podcasts as “the writer behind 25,000,000 views!”

Like, sure, it’s not a “lie”. But it’s not nuanced either.

I mean, who could have guessed that my time working with viral video machine Mike Shake would suddenly add another 10m views to “my” view counter?

It comes down to this:

Your reputation is more important than anything else, especially if “proving your value” isn’t completely straightforward.

Your “view count” (which is often misleading) is way less influential than what influential people say about you.

I still have relationships with creator teams I worked with literally once, even if the script went kinda badly.

Yes, good work is important, but how you conduct yourself both during the relationship AND in the aftermath (on Twitter, podcasts, etc) has a longer-term impact than anything.

That’s not to say you shouldn’t shout about how many views you’ve contributed to.

But don’t use it as a crutch.

And definitely don’t inflate the number of videos you say you’ve worked on just to sound more impressive.

Back yourself as a person and as a creative to do good work - your reputation will carry you forward.

That's all for this week!

I definitely owe a few of you replies from the last couple of emails.

I'll get back to those - and any thoughts you have on this one - next week ✌️

Speak soon,
George 👋

Hey!

I run a community of 150+ scriptwriting-focused YouTubers, and it should come as no surprise:

The thing we spend the most time workshopping is hooks.

I’ve been so impressed by the quality of feedback my students offer each other.

So, I’ve collated (and anonymised) some hooks my students have shared, and the feedback we’ve offered to help improve them.

These are the 4 most common hook-writing problems I see every month.

Problem #1 - Specificity:

The last thing we want is an ultra-general hook that doesn’t give the viewer clarity about how you’re going to tackle their problem.

So always be precise when you’re outlining the video’s structure to make it feel more digestible.

Before:

"I've uncovered a few key insights that will help you lose body fat."

After:

I've uncovered five simple, science-backed strategies that will help you lose body fat.

“A few key insights” might sound ok at first.

But the community raised concerns that this phrase was too vague to be engaging.

Instead, be specific about the structure (”five”) and emphasise why the audience should care (”science-backed strategy”).

Problem #2 - Stakes:

The big question:

What is at stake in your video? What does your audience (or the character in the video) stand to lose?

Playing on these emotions is critical to keep viewers watching.

In the community, we’ve noticed a tendency to imply the negative implications of not doing X, Y or Z, without calling out the target audience's fears directly.

Before:

You definitely don't want to mess this cake up, so pay close attention to every step.

After:

Until you learn to follow these steps, your cake will taste dry and bland, or worse - it’ll just collapse completely.

Make it easy for your viewer to picture what’s at cake.

(Ok, I’ll leave.)

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Problem #3 - Relevance:

It goes without saying - when writing a hook, we have a matter of seconds to entice the audience to keep watching.

So always ask yourself:

Does every sentence need to be there? Is it obvious why I mentioned [X]?

Here’s an example where a couple of sentences felt a bit out of place:

Before:

I recently listened to a podcast with [figure of authority] - she wrote [impressive book].

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She has spent years speaking on how to build and maintain powerful professional relationships.

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My goal for the next 3 months is to build stronger professional relationships here is how I’m going to do it.

After:

[Show clip of [figure of authority] offering a nugget of wisdom - enough to pique curiosity.]

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This is [figure of authority] - she wrote [impressive book].

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Her business does over $10,000,000 in revenue each year, which she attributes to the strength of her network.

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So my plan is simple…

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Over the next 90 days, I'm going to follow [figure of authority]’s advice to strengthen and expand my network - and I’ll reveal whether this actually generates additional revenue for my business.”

So what changed here?

Well, one of my community members gave this sage advice:

“Don’t add details unless it’s clear why they’re necessary.”

Before, it wasn’t obvious why the hook began by referencing that particular figure of authority.

Yes, they were related to the topic.

But you could just as easily have started the hook without the first two sentences and it would have made no difference.

In the rewrite, we circle back to that figure of authority at the end of the hook, which makes it clear that her specific advice will play an integral role in the video.

Problem #4 - Proof:

Promising a solution to a particular problem?

You’ve got to ask yourself why should the audience listen to you specifically.

(Especially if you’re competing in a saturated niche.)

But how do you do this if you’re worried your experience doesn’t sound impressive enough?

For example, one of my community members is a fantastic music tutor, but because he only likes to work with a limited number of students at once, he was concerned that saying “I’ve coached [X] students…” would sound a bit lame.

So let’s workshop some alternatives if you’re in a similar position:

Before:

“I’ve coached more than 50 pianists…”

After:

• “I’ve been a professional pianist for 30 years…”
• “I’ve composed more than 500 songs on the piano…”
• “Since starting this channel I've helped hundreds of songwriters level up their piano playing…”
• I’ve played some of the world's biggest concert halls in my career…”
• “I’m not a famous pianist, but my music has been streamed more than one million times…”

You can always get creative with how you “prove” your expertise during the hook.

That's all for this week!

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And let me know... which problems have you noticed in your hooks (and how did you fix them?)

Speak soon,
George 👋

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